#1 Question to Ask Yourself After A First Draft

You’ve completed a first draft, you look at the mound of papers on your desk, and wonder what next.

How do you look at your draft with new eyes. There is a lot of advice about putting your novel in a drawer for a few weeks before looking at it again, sending it to others for a beta read, reading it aloud etc.

But what if you want to do something more practical and immediate?

For each scene ask yourself: WHAT IS THE POINT OF THIS SCENE?

Try not to answer in a generic way.

An easy answer is: Moves the story forward.

To me, that’s too general. How does the scene move the story forward? Be as specific as you can.

Ask yourself: Does the scene

  1. have an important revelation, clue or red herring?
  2. develop a character? To me this means, does the reader learn something new about a character that is important to a story?
  3. introduce a new character?
  4. show character motivation?
  5. give the reader a break after a high action scene?
  6. give the reader action after a break scene (sometimes called a sequel scene)?
  7. foreshadow, give backstory or contain an important flashback?
  8. develop setting that is important to the story and not just setting for the sake of describing something?
  9. close off loose ends?
  10. solve the crime?

If you can’t articulate the point of  a scene, think about removing the scene.

If the point of the scene is weak, see if you can take what is important in a scene and move it to another scene. Then delete the weak scene.

I use a spreadsheet to keep track of each scene. One column is dedicated to the point of the scene. If a cell remains empty when I’ve reviewed the entire novel then the scene must go.

Please share any tips you can add in the comments below.

I used this technique while writing DESCENT, BLAZE and AVALANCHE.

Thanks for reading…

If you’re interested, you can buy or download a sample of DESCENT at:  myBook.to/Descent

Farley’s Friday: Bear Barking

Farley here,

I’ve finally trained my humans to understand my barks.

A deep growl followed by frantic, high pitched barks means: “There is a bear within 20 feet.” There is a lot of body language involved here too. Mostly, me putting my body between the humans and the bear, so the humans know which way to retreat.

Deep, in the throat, repeated barking means:  “There is a bear in the area but not close.” I’m a herder by genetics, so…I herd them away to safety.

Howling, long barks mean: “There is an aggressive deer nearby.” My experience, a doe with a fawn can be cranky at the best of times. My front paws usually lift off the ground during this communication.

Cheery barks mean: “There is a deer, but a nice one nearby.”

Barking while running in a circle, repeatedly looking at my human, and wagging my tail means: “There is a squirrel, so let me go chase it.”

It’s exhausting teaching humans to understand my language, but since their sense of smell is lousy, they need to be warned if there is a creature in the neighbourhood.

After a strenuous session of teaching Kristina dog speak, we relax with a yoga class.  I’m supposed to be doing the downward dog, but I’m just too tired.

Farley doing Joga

Woof Woof.

Facebook Launch Party: Practice Makes Perfect

To continue with tips on hosting a FaceBook Launch party, I thought I’d let you know about two parties that are happening this weekend.

Two authors will be hosting their first launch party, and this is a great opportunity not only to support other authors but to see a launch party in action. Both releases are published by Imajin Books.

To entice you to stop by, I’ll be giving away one eBook copy (kindle format) of DESCENT during each party. There are other authors donating books too, but you’ll have to check out the parties to find out who.

First up is author Debra Purdy Kong. Click on her banner below and you’ll be taken to the sign-up page for her event. It’s on Saturday September 12th from 5 to 7 PM EST.

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DEAD MAN FLOATING  Description:

One wrong decision…

Security guard Evan Dunstan didn’t expect to find a body floating in a campus stream. An empty vodka bottle nearby suggests that the highly despised George Krenn, head of the plumbing department, had drunkenly fallen in. Refusing to let the death of a vile man ruin his romantic plans, Evan decides to leave the body for the next shift to find.

One friend in trouble…

When it’s discovered that Krenn was murdered, Evan has a lot of explaining to do. So does his friend Sully, Krenn’s least favourite student. Evan uses his hacking skills and campus knowledge to keep them both out of jail, but the investigation forces him to question Sully’s innocence.

One mystery to solve…

Uncovering the truth proves to be more than challenging. It may cost Evan his job, his friendship, and his woman. Will Evan find the killer, or will the killer find him first?

Second up is Kathleen Duhamal with DEEP BLUE. Click on the book cover below to be taken to the sign up page for her launch party. It’s on Sunday September 13th. 7 to 10 PM EST.

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DEEP BLUE Description:

Love is the most addicting drug of all…

“Barely-not-starving” Denver artist and cancer survivor Claire Martin has almost given up finding an older man with a youthful spirit when she meets charismatic New York soul singer Robert Silver of the legendary band Deep Blue. She soon learns that hero worship can be dangerous, especially when the object of her desire comes with a disturbing past.

Robert is smart and sexy with a self-deprecating sense of humor, but he’s also a man who has suffered from panic attacks, drug abuse, a well-publicized stint in rehab and the death of his wife, screenwriter Elaine Jordan. When his demons resurface on tour, jeopardizing his voice and the band’s future, Claire must decide if she’s willing to take the biggest risk of her life—betting her future on a troubled man.

Thanks for reading..

If you’re interested, you can buy or download a sample of DESCENT at:  myBook.to/Descent

Who are my blog readers?

My burning quest is to know more about who is reading and engaging with my blog. I’ve a computer mathematics degree, and it’s my nature to analyze data to make things (as in my blog) better. Today I’m focussing on writers.

So if you’re a writer, will you help me by answering a few questions?

Thank you for helping me!

Mystery Mondays: Allison Bruce – Spicy Romantic Suspense

There is so much to author Alison Bruce – Copywriter, editor, and graphic designer, but today were are talking about the romantic, suspenseful part of her life. You’ll get to check an excerpt of A BODY GUARD TO REMEMBER and hear what she has to say about her protagonist.

So here we go… From Alison herself:

A BODYGUARD TO REMEMBER

Book 1 Men in Uniform

By Alison Bruce

Lachesis Publishing Inc

“Classic romantic suspense spiced with warmth and humour”

“This is a fun read and Bruce is a talented storyteller”

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Some women daydream about being swept of their feet by Prince Charming. Others dream about seducing, or being seduced, by the sexy paranormal beast of their choice. I wanted new flooring, so I told myself a story that involved me getting it. After a while, the story became Pru Hartley’s… probably around the time I finally got new flooring.

Excerpt:

It started with a dead body on my living room floor.

I had just picked up the twins from their father. While they took the recycling bins from the porch to the curb, I unlocked the front door, which led directly into the living room. I turned on the overhead light as I passed the switch, froze, and then pressed my hand over my mouth to stop a scream. Since the man in the middle of the floor could hardly be alive with a gaping hole in the back of his head, I didn’t feel obliged to check on him. Holding my breath, I backed out of the house and called my ex to come take the kids back.

Then I called 9-1-1.
“Mom?”

“Hold on Boone.” I hooked his sister by her arm and guided them toward the car. “This is Prudence Hartley at 13 Wildwood Crescent in Guelph. I need the police.”

“Mom?” It was Hope this time, trying to pull away and look through our front window.

“Back to the car,” I hissed. “I was speaking to my kids, officer . . . yes, this is an emergency. There’s a strange man in my house. He’s dead.”

(End of excerpt)

Prudence Hartley has the same problems of every other single mom: getting her kids to school on time; juggling a gazillion errands while trying to get a full day’s work done; oh, don’t forget about dinner. But everything is about to change for Pru when she finds a dead man in her house. Or a dead spy to be exact.

Suddenly Pru’s problems become a tad more complicated and a lot more dangerous. When a federal agent named David Merrick shows up and whisks her and her kids into protective custody, Pru has so many questions running through her brain she doesn’t know where to begin.

How is she going to keep her kids safe? What was the dead spy looking for in her house? Why are they after her now? Oh and there’s one more question . . . just a pesky, minor thing. Why does Merrick have to be so damn sexy and protective?

Available at:

Author Bio

2013-Bruce-author-400Alison Bruce has had many careers and writing has always been one of them. Copywriter, editor and graphic designer since 1992, Alison has also been a comic book store manager, small press publisher, webmaster and arithmetically challenged bookkeeper. She is the author of mystery, romantic suspense and historical western novels.

abruce@alisonbruce.ca

www.alisonbruce.ca / alison bruce, have laptop – will travel / @alisonebruce

Next week on Mystery Mondays get ready to meet Melodie Campbell.

Farley’s Friday: Mountain Water

Farley here,

It’s true, it’s early September, but the pond I’m standing in is part of a river that comes from the top of the mountain and it’s freezing.

Someone tell this boy to hurry up and throw the stick. He’s not paying attention to my eyes and my command. I guess he’s just not old enough to speak dog.

Farley and Noah

Woof Woof

IDEAS: Where do they come from? How do you keep them?

Thank you, Melodie, for hosting me on your blog. And Melodie is…

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The Toronto Sun called Melodie Campbell Canada’s “Queen of Comedy.”  Library Digest compared her to Janet Evanovich.  No surprise, then, that Melodie Campbell got her start writing comedy.

Melodie has won ten awards for fiction, including the Derringer and the Arthur Ellis.  In 1999, she opened the Canadian Humour Conference.  She has over 200 publications including 100 comedy credits, and 40 short stories.  Her tenth novel, a mob caper entitled The Goddaughter Caper (Orca Books) will be published in 2016.

Originally posted on Melodie Campbell (The home of Bad Girl Comedy)…

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I’m very pleased to welcome friend and colleague Kristina Stanley here, a crime writer who has been nominated for prestigious crime awards before even having a book published.  Well, that is definitely a secret to getting a publisher, folks, and now come the books.  Over to you now, Kristina!

Late one night in Unteruhldingen, Germany I was reading MOONLIGHT BECOMES YOU by Mary Higgins Clark. The opening—a woman trapped in a grave. Darkness and silence surround her, and she doesn’t know where she is. I can still see her fingers clawing at the edges of the coffin.

… View Remaining Blog at: Melodie Campbell

Thanks for reading…

If you’re interested, you can buy or download a sample of DESCENT at:  myBook.to/Descent

FOR SALE: 47′ BRISTOL 47.7 CENTER COCKPIT

Different Drummer is for sale.

Why am I posting this you ask? This is not my boat, but I’ve sailed along side her from the Bahamas to Aruba. While on Allura (my sloop) and then on Mattina (my catamaran), I cruised with her owners from 2000 to 2003 and again from 2009 to 2014, so I know she’s been lovingly maintained, she sails fast, and she is solid on the ocean.

Different Drummer

I’ve sailed on Different Drummer, slept on Different Drummer, had endless dinners on Different Drummer, and fished from Different Drummer, which is why I can tell you this boat is designed to provide you with the ultimate cruising experience.

If you’re interested in this lovely sailboat, contact Martin Bird & Associates. You’ll find the details and many photos on their website.

Thanks for reading…

Mystery Mondays: Rosemary McCracken Safe in Safe Harbor?

While Rosemary McCracken will tell you her main protagonist is much nicer than she is, don’t believe it. Rosemary is a generous author who supports other authors.

Screen Shot 2015-11-09 at 4.13.30 PMSAFE HARBOR  had me biting my nails and kept me up late at night, and BLACK WATER kept the suspenseful ride going. The books are a must read – if you haven’t read them already. Let’s welcome Rosemary…

Interview with Rosemary McCracken

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Rosemary McCracken is a Toronto-based fiction and journalist. Safe Harbor, the first novel in her Pat Tierney mystery series, was shortlisted for Britain’s Debut Dagger Award in 2010. It was published by Imajin Books in 2012, followed by Black Water in 2013. “The Sweetheart Scamster,” a Pat Tierney short story in the anthology, Thirteen, was a finalist for a 2014 Derringer Award.

Jack Batten, The Toronto Star’s crime fiction reviewer, calls Pat “a hugely attractive sleuth figure.”

What was the inspiration for the character of Pat Tierney?

As a journalist, I’ve written about personal finance and the financial services industry for the past 20 years. For these articles, I interview financial advisors and investment managers. I attend their conferences. I know the issues they face and the concerns they have.

And when I was looking for a central character for a mystery series, Pat Tierney appeared full-blown in my mind. She has the traits of the people I admire most in the industry. She cares about her clients. She’s a champion of small investors. She has sleepless nights when markets are down.

Who is the most complex character in your novels?

Pat Tierney is undoubtedly the most complex character in the series. She’s committed to restoring law, order and harmony in each book, but she also has a whack of family problems to deal with. In Safe Harbor, she learns that that her late husband had another woman in his life and fathered a child with her who is now seven.

Are there characters in your books who are similar to yourself?

Some readers think Pat Tierney is me, but nothing could be further from the truth. Pat is a financial advisor, while I’m a journalist. She’s a mother who spends a lot of time worrying about her family; I don’t have children. She’s also a much nicer person than I am: kind, compassionate and always tries to do the right thing. Pat is definitely not me. But she is a person I’d like to be.

Your mysteries have appeared on Amazon’s top financial thriller list. What’s the draw of a financial thriller?

Easy money is always alluring. We’ve all fantasized about what our lives would be like if we won a big lottery prize or received a surprise inheritance. Money we didn’t have to work hard for. Most of us are content to keep these thoughts as fantasies. But there are some people who aren’t.

What are you currently working on?

I’m in the home stretch of writing the third Pat Tierney mystery, which opens three months after the conclusion of Black Water. Like Black Water, it is set in Canadian cottage country, in a fictitious community that bears a very strong resemblance to the real Haliburton Highlands north of Toronto where I have a summer home.

Which author has influenced your work the most, and why?

Veteran Canadian mystery author Gail Bowen has been a wonderful influence. Gail read an excerpt from an early draft of the Safe Harbor manuscript and suggested that I use a first-person narrator instead of third-person. “The reader has to be inside Pat Tierney’s head all the way through this book,” she said. Gail was absolutely correct! As soon as I started rewriting the manuscript in first person, I knew it was the right way to go.

What’s your fiction writing schedule like?

Ideally, I’d like to sit down at my computer every morning around nine and write for three or four hours. No rituals to get in the mood, just bum-in-the-chair. If I experience a bout of writers’ block, I’ll write character profiles during that time. Or try taking the story in different directions…winging it, having a character in the chapter do something crazy and unplanned. This type of exercise often loosens the block, and it sometimes produces useful material.

But that’s the ideal situation. In reality, my “other work,” journalism, often interferes. I may have a morning interview scheduled or I may need to prepare for an interview later in the day. I just write off those days for writing fiction, and try to get in my chair by 9 a.m. the following day.

What lessons did you learn as a pre-published author?

Never give up. And take advantage of every opportunity to get work published. I entered writing contests, attended conferences and networked with other writers. And I had to learn not to let negative comments about my work get me down. Negative comments are often just sour grapes.

Do you have any ideas for a movie adaptation of Safe Harbor

I’d like to see Nicole Kidman play Pat Tierney in movie versions of the books. George Clooney can take the role of Pat’s beau, Devon Shaughnessy.

How can people connect with you?

They can visit my website at http://www.rosemarymccracken.com/ and my blog at http://rosemarymccracken.wordpress.com/

And follow me on Twitter at http://www.twitter.com/RCMcCracken. And on Facebook at https://www.facebook.com/rosemarymccracken

Where can readers find your books? 

Safe Harbor is on Amazon.com  http://www.amazon.com/Safe-Harbor-ebook/dp/B007GAM6PE and Amazon.ca http://www.amazon.ca/Safe-Harbor-Rosemary-McCracken/dp/192699745X

Black Water is on Amazon.com http://www.amazon.com/Black-Water-Tierney-Mystery-ebook/dp/B00CWF2X8S and Amazon.ca http://www.amazon.ca/Black-Water-Tierney-Mystery-ebook/dp/B00CWF2X8S/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1369086694&sr=1-1&keywords=Black+Water%2C+Rosemary+McCracken

Synopsis of Safe Harbor and Black Water:

Safe Harbor, the first Pat Tierney mystery, opens when a visitor to Pat’s Toronto office tells Pat that her late husband fathered a child who is now seven years old. Stunned by the announcement, Pat is even more surprised when the visitor bolts from the office, leaving young Tommy behind. When Tommy’s mother is murdered the following day, police say that the boy may be the killer’s next victim. In a race to protect Tommy, Pat uncovers a deadly scheme involving illegal immigrants, trafficking in human body parts and money laundering.

Black Water takes Pat to cottage country north of Toronto when her daughter asks for help finding her missing sweetheart, Jamie Collins. Pat heads out to the rural community where Jamie grew up and where an elderly man was recently murdered. Pat’s search for Jamie takes her through a maze of fraud, drugs, bikers and murder.

Next week I have the pleasure of hosting Alison Bruce, author of mystery, historical and romantic suspense.